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Of war, of war this day I write,
Of battle and blood that is shed in the night,
Of cries and screams of blood and pain,
I wish this night to become day's light.

The pain, the pain of the killing pursuit,
The scars etched upon berserker brutes,
The hate and fear of fire and lead,
I see the fruit of the reaper's loot.

Oh fire, oh fire and destruction's start,
Oh copper and lead seeking the foes' hearts,
Oh flesh and bone you sought to rend,
And as their souls depart,

The devil sees your new art.
This is a poem I wrote for...:iconpassionforpoetry:'s Rememberance Day Contest
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The Reaper's Loot by ~Mordial33 ( Featured by thorns )
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Si1verwing Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. This is great. I wish I could say more than that, but I can't really put it into words.
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it!
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Si1verwing Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.
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realartist123 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Student Writer
Fucking. LOVE IT
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realartist123 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Writer
What I think attracts me to it is how you used specific language to make the poem sound "old" like a ritual being chanted by a witch after a bloody medieval battle. It gives your poem this folklore feel that I really like.

Other than that, I like it just because it's grim, dark, and sinister. Hope that helped.
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! If you don't mind me asking, what did you like about it? Was there anything in particular? Thanks again!
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crimsonlegion Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012
really nice my friend, well done :D
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much for the wonderful comment! It is much appreciated!
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Deus-Suetonius Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
definitely worth the DD <3 beautiful.
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:iconmordial33:
Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks man! Much appreciated!
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Odoms-Spire Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is INCREDIBLE! I really love this! The wording and the imagery it gives...Awesome job! :love;
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sweet! I'm glad you liked it so much! :squee:
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Odoms-Spire Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very much so! :)
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TeaPhotography Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Professional General Artist
This is fantastic! :clap:
Congratulations, by the way! :party:
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, and thank you very much!
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LoneRobin Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You definitely deserve the DD, great job!
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! Thanks for the support! :iconawesomeplz:
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LoneRobin Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :aww:
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LostNorthern Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
MASS EFFECT
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm a little bit retarded sometimes...what do you mean by MASS EFFECT? Are you recommending the game to me, or does my poem remind you of the game? (Sorry if that came off as rude!)
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LostNorthern Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
i mean...reapers...and all i really thought you made your poem a reference to the game LOL
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GabrielSaint Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
Well written, emotional and beautiful. I am speechless. You are a great wordsmith and you should keep up the good work.
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you a whole lot! I definitely will! Thanks for the comment, the compliment, and the fave!
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Nuclear000Rainbow Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
amazing poem... both dark and beautiful... ^^
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! I recognize that guy in the icon! After seeing one of his music videos, I about shit myself seeing him as the stalker ex-boyfriend in NCIS!
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Nuclear000Rainbow Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
what icon and what guy? you thinking about Syn? lol
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WyckedDreamsDesigns Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
Amazing writing and amazing imagery.This poem gave me goose bumps..Excellent
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow...goose bumps as in scary, or goose bumps as in OH MY FRIGGIN GLOB!!!!! THIS SHIT IS AMAZING!!!!!? Oh, and thanks for the compliment!
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WyckedDreamsDesigns Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
As in oh My this shit is amazing work..lol Welcome huni.
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Congratulations! You deserve it!
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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JackieStarSister Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is excellent; it's poignant and extremely well-written. Thank you for sharing this.
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problemo! It is a bit from my darker side. Well, most of my poetry has a hint of cynicism and darkness in them. Thank you for the compliment!
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JamminJo Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Congratulations on your DD :)
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! I love the icon! It reminds me of my older sister's Chiweenie! (Chihuahua and Weiner dog mix.)
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JamminJo Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Welcome :)

And........

My icon is my dog Brody he is full Chihuahua :)
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dynamicability Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
I think that is strong story because there's a violence out the house... I guest I feel shocks in the reality...
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much for the awesome feedback! I'm glad that it resonates with you! (Sorry that it is scary...war is a scary thing...)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :heart:
Have a nice day! : )
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nicely written and very strong as well congrats
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, and thank you for the compliment!
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
Compressed and strong, Congratulations on your D.D!!
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad you thought that! And I really appreciate it!
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Darth-Hippie Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
This poem is amazing. I loved the imagery. The rhythm is fast and chaotic, which fits the theme, and the last line leaves a big mark on me. You've inspired me, and I hope you keep writing.
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I will definitely keep writing! Thanks for the feedback! :la:
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Rama-Kay Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow.. War is the worst thing ever...
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, war is the worst. Especially because if we all kill each other with such little provocation, the roaches will inherit the earth after we're gone...a fate worse than death...

Sorry, I'm terrified of roaches. I hate them just about as much as I hate war...:fork:
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Rama-Kay Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
XD I hate roaches too :)
Roaches' haters FTW!!
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